our first excerpt:
“Gathering my satchel, I smile wryly at her, then head out the door to the car. I cannot believe I have let Kate talk me into this. But then Kate can talk anyone into anything.”
Mrs. James you are so transparent! and really bad at writing.
To give some perspective, the main character Anastasia Steele ( oh see what she did there? the heroine’s name is Steele, like steel the metal that is gray. Gray like Grey the name of the “mysterious” Christian Grey. She is a clever, clever woman.) Is filling in for her very best friend Katherine Kavanaugh, for a very important assignment for the last issue of the college newspaper. Said assignment in to interview one Christian Grey a VERY RICH AND POWERFUL 27 year old businessman.
But, do you see what she is trying so hard to do here? Setting up the heroine submissive as a submissive, the type to “get talked into” anything out of some self righteous idea of self sacrifice.
There are much more effective and subtle ways to do this Mrs. James. The whole book has a feel of having been hurriedly put together the night before a 6AM deadline. All plot devices and “misdirection” are so utterly transparent, I can’t help but roll my eyes about every other paragraph.